I gave Deadly Alliance 3.5*
“Finbar Donahue, former Army Ranger, walked on the wild side in Iraq, but now he lives in the shadows. After his evasive partner, Les, was shot in a random drive-by, Finn discovers cash is siphoned monthly. He fights to keep his investment company afloat. When the late partner’s girlfriend, Amy Kintyre, applies for his bookkeeping job, Finn suspects she knows about his company drain and hires her.
Amy needs a nine-to-five with free evenings and weekends to get her fashion design business back on track. She unearths Les’ s secret bank account and alerts Finn. Freezing of the money laundering account sets off havoc within an Irish gang. Amy witnesses a gang fight between a brutal ISIS fundraising organization and the Irish. Desperate to escape a stalker’s crosshairs, she seeks refuge with Finn. As danger heats up, sparks fly hotter.
Les is alive. After cheating the Irish mob, he became their target. Mistaken identity took the life of his disabled twin brother. Now Les makes another deal—trading Amy and stolen drugs for their forgiveness. Stakes are high as Finn tracks assassins across the San Bernardino Mountains. If he gets her back, can he trust her?”
For me the blurb tells too much; it’s a while before we learn Less is still alive. I would have liked that to remain a secret until the story evolved more. There are two excellent plots running parallel in the book that Kathleen Rowland juggles expertly; one of fraud and one of terrorism and crime. They are good, though complicated plot-lines that keeps the reader on their toes. Added to that are the various sub-plots; of Les and the familial complicated lives of Finn’s step family.
When I first started to read Deadly Alliance I instantly liked both the protagonists, Amy Kintyre and Finn Donahue. Good rounded characters, portrayed as ambitious and strong. I looked forward to following their story. and we learn a lot of their back story without any information dumping.
And the many brilliant secondary characters are also given depth and personalities.
The story is told from an omniscient narrator’s point of view who dips into each character so that we can follow the train of thought from both Amy and Finn. My problem here was that sometimes the lines blurred and I had to go back and re-read to check who I was following. And, once or twice, the author gave the point of view from a minor character. Now this last point is a personal one; I like the points of view separate; to be told the story in different time lines or chapters. If, as a reader, I’m to look into a character’s head, I want them to have more input, even to have equal input. But, as I’ve said, this is purely a personal preference.
My other problems were phrases and the dialogue. And again this could be the difference between the UK and USA perspectives. Or I didn’t quite ‘get’ the genre. I don’t know. I just found some of the phrases and descriptions from the omniscient narrator of the characters’ body language and actions were over-explained and laboured. I just couldn’t picture them, or they seemed unrealistic. This was in some of the ordinary scenes, the fight scenes and the sex scenes. With reference to the sex scenes I have read many and they never offend. It wasn’t that; I only mean that, from my point of view, there was too much emphasis on them and the sexual innuendos; they were too overtly erotic compared with the rest of the book. And they detracted from the two strong plot-lines. I would have preferred them to be more subtle. And the fight scenes, although described blow by blow, felt strangely detached in their commentary.
And I found both Amy and Finn’s dialogue, internal and spoken,sometimes clichéd and grating; they read oddly for me; quick fire comments such as “curse a blue streak” and ” third- wheel nervousness” interspersed with each of the characters’ dialogue, took me right out of the story; suspended disbelief in other words. I felt this to be a shame. But … as I said, this could perhaps be the difference between a reader in the UK and one in the USA.
Very much on the plus side are the brilliant descriptions of the various settings that the author give us. The scenes in Burlie’s Jazz Club, the various outdoors scenarios, the houses, the cabin, the weather, the pontoon.boat scenes; all are full of evocative imagery; all give a true sense of place.
I was glad that, towards the ending, there was resolution for Amy’s original plans; that the author returned to the first scenes of the book. It brought about a sense of resolution. In fact there was a couple of lovely scenes towards the end that resolved quite a lot for nearly all of the characters. I enjoyed those.
And then there was the twist at the end. It felt a little rushed but it was a good denouement.
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Thank you Judith.
Thank you, Judith Barrow, for your generous donation of time to read and review Deadly Alliance. I am taking all of your comments to heart. Reviews provide valuable insights for writers. All the best to you and Rosie Amber’s dedicated staff.
Hi Kathleen, I hope all of the review helped. I have to say the second eBook was much improved to read. I have looked at all my books when reviewed. Some comments helped, others I pondered on. But remember, all reviews are subjective. We read in different ways. Looking forward to the next book.Judithx
You are most kind, Judith, to be willing to read my next book. I value your expertise.
Always glad to help, Kathleen.