As some of you may know, as well as holding private creative writing workshops, I also tutor creative writing for Pembrokeshire County Council. Tutoring adults can be rewarding (discovering wonderful writers), chaotic (my lesson plans are rarely followed – someone will inevitably take things off at a tangent) hilarious (the undiscovered comedian/ the completely unaware comedian) and thought-provoking (especially with memoir writing) Every now and then I like to share some of their work.
Below are Alex Abercrombie’s versions.
However, this first poem, written by him, was taken tongue in cheek by me… yet, I suppose, is one I could even blatantly use as promotion for Pattern of Shadows
REPEATING PATTERNS
for Judith Barrow
Poor Nelly:
She tried so hard,
But both her sons
Turned out feral.
One of them
Raped a woman.
Someone drowned him,
Then worse followed –
His brother
Randy for revenge
Traced and murdered
The wrong man.
Hang on, though –
Haven’t we heard
This tale told far
Better before?
Same story,
Same characters,
Same web of dark
Motivations?
Writer’s cramp’s
A piffling excuse
For pilfering
Judith’s plot!
Oh, Judith –
You try so hard
To make even
Scum seem human,
But (unless
I’ve totally
Misread you) your
Refined fury
At things folk
Do to each other
Is what really
Drives your pen.
HACKNEYED
This are Alex’s. In the following first stanza these are his words not mine!!
So-called
Shadormas.
Most of them
Following
A well-worn rut (the last one’s
Not quite so hackneyed.)
*
I wonder:
Why is it so hard
To extract
Poetry
From social tittle-tattle
And the day’s routine?
*
Why is it
That washing dishes
And weeding
And putting
The bins out never kindles
The Muse’s candle?
*
Why doesn’t
Saying Bore da
To neighbours,
Or strangers,
Or builders, ever evoke
Interesting rhymes?
*
If Larkin,
Patiently rubbing
His boredoms
Together,
Could burn holes in people’s hearts,
Why can’t I do it?
I’ve not heard of the Shadorma before. These are fun.
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They are, aren’t they, Mary. Always trying to find something new for the students. 🙂
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I enjoyed that! This form is new to me, Judith. Thanks for sharing Alex’s work 🙂
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Thanks for popping in, Diana. Poetry really is Alex’ s talent. 🙂
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How fun these were. Thanks for sharing Judith. 🙂 x
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Thanks, Debby. A little light relief before half term. 🙂
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🙂 x
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